Writing blog post

In writing I have been learning to use a wide range of punctuation appropriately and with increasing accuracy like . , ! ? “”
- colon :
- semi-colon ;
- hyphen -
- parentheses ( )
- brackets [ ]
- ellipses ...

I have been especially focusing on using parentheses and semi-colon. I have highlighted these in green where I have used them as well as other punctuation that I changed because it was used incorrectly. Here is a piece of my writing that shows this.

To be a good leader you need to be resilient. A great leader that is resilient is Brendon McCullum because he has played 100 consecutive test matches ; he has captained the Blackcaps through many hard tours and series and he never gave up. As my role as Head Boy I need to be resilient because if some things are hard I need to not give up and keep trying. I will be resilient by keep trying and not giving up. Another way to be a good leader is being a good active thinker.

Being a good activer thinker means that you are able to problem solve. Bill gates is a great leader because he is a great active thinker. He thought of new ideas and products.(He is one of the most successful people in the world.) Being an active thinker is important to my role because if I have to do a speech with hardly any notice. I will demonstrate this by thinking on the spot if I have to. Another trait of an effective leader is Integrity

My Water Cycle Info Report

The Water Cycle


The water cycle is an important process that all the water in the world goes through. There are different stages in the cycle and they are Evaporation, Condensation, Precipitation, Runoff and Groundwater. Also the water changes state throughout the process. It goes from liquid to gas and then to solid and back again.


Evaporation

Evaporation is an invisible process that changes water into a gas; it’s when vapour is formed from the sun heating up the water. Then the The process is made faster on a hot day. The amount of vapour in the air is humidity. When the vapour floats up to the atmosphere It forms clouds which is called condensation.


Condensation/ Precipitation

Condensation is when clouds form. It happens when the temperature changes and the vapour forms clouds. Precipitation (water coming down to earth) is when the clouds build up and water comes out of them. The water come down to earth in different forms and they are rain, hail, sleet and snow. The precipitation causes water to come down and cause runoff.


Runoff/ Groundwater.

Runoff is basicly water coming downhill. The water can come down from the hills, go straight into bodies of water or soak into the ground. A Lot of our drinking water is underground in aquifers.




And then the water gets evaporated and it goes round the water cycle again and again.

My short story

For this piece of writing I have focussing on my vocabulary and punctuation. I have been learning to: -

• use a range of precise vocabulary to communicate meaning (Year ⅞)
• use all basic punctuation independently and attempt more complex punctuation (eg semicolons, colons, parentheses) (Year 7/8

The pieces of my writing that are highlighted green are where I have shown my vocabulary and punctuation goal

The bush ride

As the engine roared into life Shaun started riding round. Then he saw his mate Dan going over the hill out of control. Shaun had a Honda CRF 450 and Dan had a KTM SX 450. They arrived at  the start of the Mackley river track near denniston they turned on to the track the track and started riding along.

They pulled up at the first turn off the main track was one way and the track to Stockton so they turned right and that was the track. They found to the highest part and there was a turn off. They turned left thinking it was the track but it wasn't. They kept going and then there was another turn-off and they went right and the track was tight and the got lost... They stopped and decided to build a fire.

Shaun said “We are very close to water” so they checked around and they discovered a little creek so they built a fire and also they made a hut from bushes and sticks. The next morning the boys got on their bikes and rode around looking for a track after a while they found a river and they rode along the bank looking for anything. They found an old hut that had heaps of stuff in it.

They spotted some guns and they went hunting the saw a huge boar charging at them… So Shaun got the gun and shot  It was that big that both of them had to carry it. They build a fire and they gutted the boar and then they cooked it.

In the morning they built a help sign and they created as much smoke as they could with the fire. Later that day a helicopter was flying around and it spotted the smoke and it landed and picked Shaun and Dan up. They got home and they were very relieved that they were home.